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IELTS Report, topic: Table of home schooled students’ percentages

The table below describes percentages of home schooled students in SomeCountry in 1999-2004. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.

You should write at least 150 words.

This table shows {tooltip}homeschooled{end-link}home schooled{end-tooltip} students in Somecountry in year 1999-2004 in {tooltip}percenages{end-link}percentages{end-tooltip}.

The main trend is that all grades including kindergarten {tooltip}is{end-link}are{end-tooltip} growing {tooltip}for{end-link}remove 'for'{end-tooltip} every year. Kindergarten started {tooltip}highest at{end-link}with percentage of{end-tooltip} 2.4 and ended highest at 2.9 percent with a constant increase. {tooltip}But{end-link}Not quite similarly{end-tooltip} grades 1-2 and grades 5-6 {tooltip}shows{end-link}show{end-tooltip} a little different trend, both {tooltip}starts{end-link}started{end-tooltip} at 1,5 percent in 1999 and {tooltip}declines{end-link}declined{end-tooltip} a little bit in 2000. Both of them increased slowly in 2002 and both {tooltip}it holds{end-link}held{end-tooltip} that course to 2004 where grades 1-2 {tooltip}ends at{end-link}reached{end-tooltip} 2,1 percent and grades 5-6 {tooltip}ends at{end-link}reached{end-tooltip} 2.6 percent.

Grades 3-4 {tooltip}has{end-link}had{end-tooltip} a slow but steady growth {tooltip}througt{end-link}throughout{end-tooltip} all six years. It {tooltip}starts{end-link}started{end-tooltip} at 1.6 percent in 1999 and {tooltip}increases{end-link}increased by{end-tooltip} 0.1 every year except in 2003 when it {tooltip}peaks up{end-link}peaked up at{end-tooltip} 0.2 percent. Grades 7-8 {tooltip}starts{end-link}started{end-tooltip} at 1.6 percent and {tooltip}stays{end-link}stayed{end-tooltip} there for three years until they rapidly rose up to 2.2 and peaked at 2.5 in 2004.

Overall, all grades including kindergarten has had a rise at {tooltip}rougly{end-link}roughly{end-tooltip} minimum 1 percent or more in 6 years.

This is a good report; here is how you can make it better: the coherence needs improvement, meaning the logical connection between sentences inside a paragraph and between paragraphs. Use more connective words (Furthermore, However, etc).

The grouping you’ve done is fine, but try to use more variations describing those statistics: use words such as numbers, figures, percentages, etc. The grammar and the spelling need some extra attention.Overall, this report seems worthy of Band 7

Source: ielts-blog.com