IELTS Letter, topic: Complaint about a faulty mobile phone

You have bought a new mobile phone and in a few days after purchase it has stopped working. You spoken to the company representative a week ago but the phone has still not been repaired.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter
- introduce yourself
- explain the situation
- say what action you would like to company to take.

Dear Sir/ Madam,

I am writing to inform you about the faulty mobile phone that I have purchased in your store.

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Naturally, I returned the mobile phone in your store to be replaced with a new one. One of your {tooltip}sales staff{end-link}sales staff members{end-tooltip}told me that they will send it to my home address within one week. However, two weeks have passed without me receiving any replacement. I am very upset {tooltip}for{end-link}with{end-tooltip} your poor service.

In this regard, I insist on getting a refund of my full payment if the replacement will not arrive within one more week.

Yours faithfully,

Christine B.

This is a very good letter. The structure of paragraphs and sentences, grammar, vocabulary, the length of the letter – everything is in order. There are some minor corrections (see comments underlined in blue). Otherwise, this looks like a Band 7 letter.

Source: ielts-blog.com